tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post1783947780090394686..comments2023-05-19T13:10:03.176+01:00Comments on Winter: The Four Seasons of Haikuhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12478161106526373316noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post-32009299202873129542010-01-13T15:21:28.213+00:002010-01-13T15:21:28.213+00:00I agree regarding the unnecessary period. Otherwi...I agree regarding the unnecessary period. Otherwise, I love it, Rachel.diana l.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12508598285292827626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post-78418888868602218872010-01-13T13:11:43.501+00:002010-01-13T13:11:43.501+00:00I like your haiku, though wonder if you tell the t...I like your haiku, though wonder if you tell the truth as if it's a lie?<br /><br />It keeps the pivot line but opens the poem up, and I don't feel you need the fullstop/period unless you make the 'a' in the first capitalised?<br /><br /><i>a crow cries<br />high in the bare branches<br />melting snow</i><br /><br />Here's one of my mine originally published in Romania (2005) but revised...<br /><br /><i>carrion crow call<br />the river refracts<br />a horsechestnut tree</i><br /><br />Alan Summers<br /><br />all my best,<br /><br />AlanArea 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.com