tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post7323699290369603862..comments2023-05-19T13:10:03.176+01:00Comments on Winter: The Four Seasons of Haikuhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12478161106526373316noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post-39855311893788184882010-01-11T14:41:55.947+00:002010-01-11T14:41:55.947+00:00Thank you, Melanie.Thank you, Melanie.diana l.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12508598285292827626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post-23902423788372832732010-01-10T23:10:51.311+00:002010-01-10T23:10:51.311+00:00This is lovely. The imagery is beautiful.
Melani...This is lovely. The imagery is beautiful.<br /><br /><br />MelanieCassiopeia Riseshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02625091389788114012noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post-18079502923794052832010-01-10T04:50:06.034+00:002010-01-10T04:50:06.034+00:00Thank you, Alan. It think I will drop the parenth...Thank you, Alan. It think I will drop the parentheses. But I do want to stick with call, given the reference to the bird song.diana l.https://www.blogger.com/profile/12508598285292827626noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5141319040539099873.post-2994092401341550952010-01-09T16:36:01.817+00:002010-01-09T16:36:01.817+00:00This is incredibly beautiful...
white muffled mou...This is incredibly beautiful...<br /><br /><i>white muffled mountain<br />(I remember your bird songs)<br />now whispers its call</i><br /><br />I don't feel you need the brackets, and maybe reduce the last line?<br /><br /><i>white muffled mountain<br />I remember your bird songs<br />now whispers</i><br /><br />all my best,<br /><br />AlanArea 17https://www.blogger.com/profile/07472190637554124160noreply@blogger.com