I present this as a first attempt at tanka - composed while the dentist was inspecting my teeth!
and a good effort toojohn
Those terrific first two lines really make the poem! ;-)Alan
Thanks, John and Alan. I looked at the half-hearted Christmas decorations in the dentist's room and the start of the poem just came to me!
Well done. You have caught the essence of the timelessness of siting in a dentist chair. Ouch.love, Melanie
Thanks too, Melanie. Sitting there seemed eternal but at least the regular checkup showed my teeth were 'fine'!
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I present this as a first attempt at tanka - composed while the dentist was inspecting my teeth!
and a good effort too
john
Those terrific first two lines really make the poem! ;-)
Alan
Thanks, John and Alan. I looked at the half-hearted Christmas decorations in the dentist's room and the start of the poem just came to me!
Well done. You have caught the essence of the timelessness of siting in a dentist chair. Ouch.
love, Melanie
Thanks too, Melanie. Sitting there seemed eternal but at least the regular checkup showed my teeth were 'fine'!
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