bittersweet haiku, diane!
there is gold here diana - perhaps a little refining?snowfallconceals the scars between us
Writing two line haiku is a mystery to me, David. Educate me, please. (and thanks for the compliment!)
Dear dianai think you say everything perfectly in the two line revision and the first line weakens it.David
I guess what I'm asking is, are there any guidelines regarding syllable count, etc.?
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bittersweet haiku, diane!
there is gold here diana - perhaps a little refining?
snowfall
conceals the scars between us
Writing two line haiku is a mystery to me, David. Educate me, please. (and thanks for the compliment!)
Dear diana
i think you say everything perfectly in the two line revision and the first line weakens it.
David
I guess what I'm asking is, are there any guidelines regarding syllable count, etc.?
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