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Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun

---Arō

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misted over river
the Humber Bridge
linking to Heaven
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7 comments:

David said...

misted river
the Humber bridge
a road to nowhere

Area 17 said...

Like the first two lines, but as a kind of honourary Hullite, not the last line. ;-)

Alan
Alan’s Area 17 blog
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Spiros Zafiris said...

..like it; but somehow i sway
towards Line 1 simply being:

river mist...

Area 17 said...

Fair enough. ;-)

It wasn't simply river mist though, which is where I got stuck.

The bridge (and it is big) looked disembodied, not just from river mist, but a separate bank of fog, and low cloud too.

Any ideas for the term?

Alan

Spiros Zafiris said...

misted over river
the Humber Bridge
linking to Heaven
.
Author Archive Alan Summers
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with what you say, Alan, it
complicates things; perhaps:

two mists in one...
they separate the Humber Bridge;
its link to Heaven
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..sp

Area 17 said...

I think I can use something from this Spiros, thank you! ;-)

Alan

Spiros Zafiris said...

..you're welcome; pleases me that you may incorporate one of my suggestions,
Alan..>>sp