great imagery, Rachel!
Those first two lines are amazing! I think if you got rid of the inversion in the last line it would make it as a whole.e.g.rain beats downon a sodium yellow streetmidnight hiss of tyresAlanAlan’s Area 17 blog.
I love the 'sodium yellow street'.
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great imagery, Rachel!
Those first two lines are amazing!
I think if you got rid of the inversion in the last line it would make it as a whole.
e.g.
rain beats down
on a sodium yellow street
midnight hiss of tyres
Alan
Alan’s Area 17 blog
.
I love the 'sodium yellow street'.
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