Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun



a fresh beginning
conceals the scars between us -


Kelly M. said...

bittersweet haiku, diane!

David said...

there is gold here diana - perhaps a little refining?

conceals the scars between us

diana l. said...

Writing two line haiku is a mystery to me, David. Educate me, please. (and thanks for the compliment!)

David said...

Dear diana

i think you say everything perfectly in the two line revision and the first line weakens it.


diana l. said...

I guess what I'm asking is, are there any guidelines regarding syllable count, etc.?