Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun

---Arō

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melon haze
snow man leans
into the rising sun


Any suggestions?

3 comments:

Alan Summers said...

I do like melon haze.

Maybe it's just considering the use of a definite or indefinite article?

melon haze
a snow man leans
into the rising sun


Alan

diana l. said...

And here I thought you wanted suggestions for how to save the poor snowman!

nora said...

I really like it, Reihaisha!