Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun


black windows
where the old man lived -
ice on my cheek


Alan Summers said...

Absolutely love those first two lines!

Maybe it needs a dash or ellipsis after "lived" though?

I could be wrong. ;-)

I'll definitely be revisting this one as it does have great resonance!


Dennis Tomlinson said...

Thanks, Alan. Following your advice, I have added a dash after 'lived': I glanced at the run-down house, now totally deserted since the occupant died - and the eerie impression gave me a start!

Spiros Zafiris said...

..quite striking..!

Dennis Tomlinson said...

Thanks, Spiros.