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Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun

---Arō
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advent chocolate
the chill of early morning
on bare arms and legs





Edited after Alan's advice
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2 comments:

Area 17 said...

I like it!

the chill of morning
claws at bare arms and legs
advent chocolate

You could also make this a 5/7/5 haiku and bring the kigo to the first line.

e.g.

advent chocolate
the chill of early morning
on bare arms and legs

all my best,

Alan
The Super Renga
.

December 03, 2009
Rachel Green said...

Lovely edit, Alan, thank you.

December 03, 2009

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