Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun

---Arō

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still the dark snow lingers
unmoved by the sun's
cool gaze

4 comments:

David said...

Really good one diana.

If it was me I'd take out 'cool'

David said...

Mistake - i'd take out 'steady' not 'cool'.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Who am I to tell you what might be better. Nice work.

Melanie

diana l. said...

Point taken, David. Thanks for the on-target feedback. I'm changing it now.

And thank you, too, Melanie.