Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun



still the dark snow lingers
unmoved by the sun's
cool gaze


David said...

Really good one diana.

If it was me I'd take out 'cool'

David said...

Mistake - i'd take out 'steady' not 'cool'.

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Who am I to tell you what might be better. Nice work.


diana l. said...

Point taken, David. Thanks for the on-target feedback. I'm changing it now.

And thank you, too, Melanie.