This is incredibly beautiful...white muffled mountain(I remember your bird songs)now whispers its callI don't feel you need the brackets, and maybe reduce the last line?white muffled mountainI remember your bird songsnow whispersall my best,Alan
Thank you, Alan. It think I will drop the parentheses. But I do want to stick with call, given the reference to the bird song.
This is lovely. The imagery is beautiful.Melanie
Thank you, Melanie.
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This is incredibly beautiful...
white muffled mountain
(I remember your bird songs)
now whispers its call
I don't feel you need the brackets, and maybe reduce the last line?
white muffled mountain
I remember your bird songs
now whispers
all my best,
Alan
Thank you, Alan. It think I will drop the parentheses. But I do want to stick with call, given the reference to the bird song.
This is lovely. The imagery is beautiful.
Melanie
Thank you, Melanie.
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