Today is also ending--
at the bottom of the snowstorm
the gigantic sun

---Arō

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a crow cries
high in the bare branches
melting snow patters.

2 comments:

Alan Summers said...

I like your haiku, though wonder if you tell the truth as if it's a lie?

It keeps the pivot line but opens the poem up, and I don't feel you need the fullstop/period unless you make the 'a' in the first capitalised?

a crow cries
high in the bare branches
melting snow


Here's one of my mine originally published in Romania (2005) but revised...

carrion crow call
the river refracts
a horsechestnut tree


Alan Summers

all my best,

Alan

diana l. said...

I agree regarding the unnecessary period. Otherwise, I love it, Rachel.